POEM:
"UNBROKEN"
POETESS: RAFIYA SYEED
ANALYSIS BY: TARIQ
AHMAD TARIQ
The poetess has
preferred didactic tone to give vent to
her emotions on the canvas. She seems to have visualized somewhere the silver
lining encircling the darkest clouds while facing the life headlong.
The caption
"UNBROKEN" connotes that there has never been smooth going for the
big achievers, but they have resolved to go tough against all odds.
From the narrators
perspective the crises, which the prospective achievers undergo, could have depressed them to the core but
their approach of acting brave and
standing rock strong helped them spell out success. Now when the storms have
retreated, they have a reason to tell the curious world the talisman of their victory.
The poetess, as I
suppose, shares her experience how tasty
had been the fruits of the endurance after she declined to yield before the
ills and pains inflicted upon her by destiny.
The poetess
presumably feels that the world belongs to those who dare to dream big, and
that every big dreamer is shown a price
tag for his coveted dream. Big things never come easily. They demand endurance
and sacrifice.
Whispering her
musings to her readers, the poetess explains that every prospective achiever
wants to touch stars. In order to reach the stars, they need to spread their
wings and stretch them wide to their full expanse. The poetess has created
visual images of the hazy and rough
runway, take off, soaring in sky, etc. In order to have a flight in the skies
the dreamer has to come on the runway. The runway is invariably hazy and rough.
It has always a risk factor for the dreamer whose first step is to take off.
The valiant is never deterred by the wrath of the sky. His dream of soaring in
the expanse of the sky keeps him afloat and he makes tough decisions. The
poetess wants all the readers to polish their thinking every moment. The
poetess instructs the readers to keep on toes if they want to get noticed. She
wants them to polish their thought processes
every moment. Reiterating that there is never a smooth go for a big
dreamer, the poetess dares to impress upon them
that the road is inflicted with pain and hardships, and that they need a
steel will in order to keep going. They need not get disheartened because
future belongs to those who dare to endure
with single minded devotion, and
keep consistent on their hard working approach. Hope is the unfailing weapon in
the hands of these mighty dreamers. The unbeaten flight of the big dreamers
help them discover all horizons, and scale all the skies getting visible to
them during the course of their flight.
Conclusion:The poem
"UNBROKEN" is a well knit poem. The poet has embraced the style of
"H. W. LONGFELLOW", and has put across her message in a way that it
creates a telling effect.
Kudos to the poetess!
13/01/2018
Rabia Kirmani
Poem: Masked Without
Voice(Dedicated To Zainab)Poet: Rabia Kirmani
Brief Analysis by:
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
A nice theme has been
woven into a poem. It does really show how much the poetess is receptive to the
social needs.
The plight of Zainab
seems to have shaken the poetess to the core.
The poetess has
created visual imagery at the outset. She seems to be lamenting that the
genuine voices have been choked, and the
humanity has been deported to the ground to be trampled upon every bit.
When Zainab was to be
bruised, the nature too seemed to have
been conspiring. The sun hid his
face, and the dead of the night prevailed. The cries of the victim could be
heard by none.
The poetess feels the
pain and listens to the cries which the helpless girl,zainab was denied to
shout. She visualizes her being bruised. Her childhood is brought to the altar,
and thorns are run deep down the innocence. The poetess mourns the sleuth of
the masses and cries out if they keep inactive the whole race will, for sure,
face the same fate.
Lot of love for the
poetess.
Stay blessed.
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story
"There Is Many A Slip
Between The Cup and The Lip"
A Story By:Tariq
Ahmad Tariq
Behrampora Raffiabad
Tariq Ahmad Tariq and Hassan Azhar
While driving home
from Dr Rafeeq Masoodi's residence, my friend asked me, "Tariq! What does
it mean when we say there is many a slip between the cup and the lip. "
I smiled because I
knew Hassan Azhar's ways well.
"I suppose, this
proverb is used to emphasize the power of destiny in our lives. We have the
capacity to propose, but God, at times, knows well how to dispose", I
explained.
"Today you were
victimized", Azhar laughed me silly.
"Please tell
what happened", I pleaded.
"First, give me
the account what engagements you had today here at Masoodi sir's
residence", Azhar asked.
I started
recollecting the thread of events.
I started, "At
reaching his residence we saw the grand old man seeing off some dignitaries at
the entrance. We kept waiting near the tent gate. He came barely after two
minutes. At seeing me he exclaimed, "Tariq, a great gift was given away by
the departed soul while leaving for the heavenly abode. My niece Durdana Javid
Masoodi topped the jkbose class 12th examination. "
I saw a cute smile
playing on the lips of Dr Masoodi.
The floods of the
smiles on the face of the grand old man elated me as i felt myself blessed that Dr Masoodi was sharing this happy moment
with me. He took me to the tent where we
were served food. After the food was served, we saw dignitaries from all
corners of the valley pouring in. Dr
Masoodi would, time and again, address me, and give me their introduction. A
young man kept in front of him, and Masoodi Sir yelled, "Tariq! Do you
know this young man. "
"Yes Sir, I
think he is Dr Aabid, who often forgets my name", my answer broke the
gathering into smiles.
"Have I told you
about his appointment as Editor Cultural Academy", Dr Masoodi asked.
Though I had already
been told by Masoodi sir about this, yet for the sake of other interested
people I answered I knew not. He then told how he made it to the coveted post.
In the main while, we
saw Durdana Javid, the topper of class 12th BOSE Examination entering the tent
to have some message ferried for Dr Masoodi. You (Azhar), stole the opportunity
to record her views about her grand success in the BOSE examination. Durdana
spoke in English with utmost fluency and with an inspiring accent. She thanked the Almighty Allah, the support of her
parents, teachers, and friends.
After spending two
hours in the tent listening to the valuable exchanges of different people with
Dr Rafeeq Masoodi we left for home by 4:30 pm with a promise to our patron that
we would visit him again in the coming days.
After having told the
whole story to Hassan Azhar, I asked him to tell me where I missed to make the
contact of my lip with the cup. Azhar did again smile and said the moment when
Masoodi sir addressed you saying, "Tariq!
the departed soul gifted us with a delightful news", your unseen friend,
Farhaan, came to me whispering in my ear, "Hello Sir, I am Farhan. How are
you? "
I greeted him, and in
the wink of an eye, he boarded the car
which was waiting him. The opportunity was too precious to be missed, but was too short to call you
to meet Farhan. The irony of the destiny was that You were only two feet away
from Farhan, and you still missed his glimpse. "
I smiled myself silly
and laughed but it was the laugh of the widow.
I kept murmuring for
the whole evening, "there is many a
slip between the cup and the lip".
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Poem3
The poem "Sopore
massacre" is written by Rabia Kirmani, who is just 15,and has a great
inclination towards written words. The poem was posted on a renowned literary
page "Rafiabad Adbi Markaz" for analysis and critical appreciation on
the eve of 6th January 2018, the 25th anniversary of Sopore Massacre.
Many critiques as
well as writers put their best efforts to deconstruct the poem and decipher its
message. Lets have a brief look upon the poem, and then a few of these analyses
written by different poets and critiques.
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"Sopore
Massacre"
Howling sirens
Terrible dark clouds
Pillaged Rain
Signal that the sky
was crying
Evil Sky!
Hiding behind clouds
Ashamed
At the first light of
6 january 1993
Mark of baba yousuf
lane
Inception of their
bane
Hushed Town
There was crackdown
A single Gunshot
Apple town turned
blot
94th battalion went
on rampage
butchered 57
civilians
pumped bullet into
the bodies
Dragged mercilessly
The men were lashed
JKY-1901 Driver out
passengers shootout
Wailing aloud
Shootings everywhere
48 faced down in the
mud
Inside the four
corners of this town
Snow meltdown
One bullet left them
dead
the blood they bled
Left the ground
stained red
9 burnt alive
Seeing the flames
Ashes deprive
Souls burnt
Hearts died
Apple town cried
Torched buildings
Living debased
Massacre quoted as
Farce
News hitted home
Looked into my
mothers eyes
She was searching for
a dad with a smile
Looked into my
sisters eyes
She was stitching
Dad's torn clothes that night
Looked into my
Brothers eyes
He was lifting the
Coffin of Dad
Looking into mine
They wanted HIM Back
_I lost my heaven
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Tariq Ahmad Tariq
ANALYSES OF THE POEM:
1.By: Tariq Ahmad
Tariq
"Sopore
Massarce" by Rabia Kirmaani
The poem seems to be an eye witness account from the perspective
of a minor girl from a destitute household. Her father, as per the connotations
of the text, has just left the home to
earn his living.
All of sudden the
sirens start howling and a peaceful town is brutaly exposed to miseries never
known to it before.
Gunshots are
heard, and the people are butchered like
cattle, and their bodies are mercilessly stuffed with bullets. The slaughtered
men are dragged on the roads, and the roads are thus painted red. The rampage of the houses and the
business establishments follows and the hunger of the wolves is thus satiated
to the core.
The poor girl is fear
struck. She has, however, no fears about her family untill some the mysterious
news flies and shudders the poor cottage to the core.
The mother is sobbing
but holding patience. The sister, devoid
of the fact, is still stiching dad's torn clothes to be used
by him the next day.
All of sudden the
minor girl sees her brother from the
window lifting the coffin of his dad. Thus the heaven of the minor girl is
snatched from her along with some 57 families whose wait for their parents will
never see an end.
The poem is brimmed
with pathos. The visual as well as sound imageries have been lavishly used.
Sirens have been projected the way as if wolves were howling. Rain has been
presented as if it were outlaws all set to plunder a happy and prosperious
hamlet. Yes these metaphorical connotations has given the poem a smooth go,
because these wolves as the poem plodes ahead then suck the blood of innocents,
and the scenes of rampage are seen at its maxima.
Kudos to this sweet
child poet.
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2.
Analysis by:
Dr Rafiq Masoodi
Beauty of it...
Its a beautiful
depiction of historical happening mixed with poetic imagery but historical
content has always to be consolidated with docu_facts which poet has infact
tried to mix with...people who are witness to this tragedy will know the ethos
and pain and the poetic xpression of poet...
This is
"Realistic and Formalistic Approach " to literature which Eliot TS
and Richards (am missing full name) would say A MUST in literature.
My suggestion to poet
wud b to refabric and repolish the poem and further study or at least read gr8 classical and
contemporary western and Eastern English poets to hav further experience of
poetic xpression,form and style...
Kudos to the poet fr
using xtra ordinary vcabulary of historical facts in most befitting and
aesthetical maner.
Poet is bound to
touch dizzy heights in future....
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3.Analysis by:
Farhan Zain
Itz the incident
which I m nt familiar with but I hv heard from my inmates ..I can say that the
poet has written the poem with an immotional touch..Tragic element in the poem
pinches the nerves and the pathos is seen as if the poet is an eye witness to
the incident..A good attempt and a great
start up by the budding poet..It is really priceless..The pain and
suffering is evident ..a scene is created as if we r watching it ...that means
poet has made us to observe and feel the trauma he feels..It is a pathetic
story of a hospitable land kashmir....Hats off to the poet
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4.Analysis by:
Hassan Azhar
Sopore Massacre is a
very good attempt from the poetess. She is not witnessed to that dreadful scene
but that horrible scene would have been
observed by some one else where from the poetess picked the thread and started
knitting this master piece.
The poem in a way, is
presented, shows that poetess is
observing every thing minutely of this frightful massacre. The diction of the
poem is degnified. Words not only say what happened but they also cry, weap,
crawl, creep, escape like those victimised and hapeless people who were gunned
down ruthlessly.
The artistic approach
of this buddin bloom poetess seems
mature. She knows fully what to say and how to say. As mentioned above
that she has not observed the bloody situation. She was only made known about
the massacre but the imagery of the poem speakes about the volumes of her
ability, skill and craft. The countless qualities of this beautiful poem is a
clear indication of poetesses bright future. The affectif of the narrater makes
the reader sensational. The mode of speech is motivating. The compositions and
compounds are not ambiguous.
Howling sirens,
terrible dark clouds, pittaged rain, crying evil sky, hushed town, stained red
ground, deprived ashes, burent souls, torched buildings create pain and havoc
all around. There is enough linkage between the words and the idea.
Congrats to this
budding bloom poetess
We the members of
Rafiabad Adbi Markaz wish very good future to this young poetess. We wish her
grand sucess. We expects that the poetess will groom herself and will explore
new heights in this field. We are all praises for this budding poet of North
Kashmir.
Admin
RAAM
Tariq Ahmad Tariq.
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Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Poem:4
Poet: Rahamatullah
Mir
Analysis by:Tariq
Ahmad Tariq
The poem
"Can You Handle
Me", has been woven to rhyme, and sound rhythmic. The simple diction makes
the poem a taffy to relish upon lavishly.
The content suggests
that the narrator does either live with a naive temper or poses selfishly bad tempered so as to get rid
of one-sided affair that he feels has been afflicted upon him. The narrator
posses to be merciless.
Looking between the
lines, the content suggests that the narrator deliberately chooses to tease the
candid emotions of his beloved. His target is to bring his beloved to
tears, but he chooses to go slow and
discover new low every time.
There is a satire to
candid love in making. New low could be blocking the efforts to meet, talk or
respond, or pretending selfishly disloyal,
or showing least
inclination towards continuing the affair,
or prolonging her wait.
These all things are
aimed at disappointing the beloved to the core, so that she could be made to lament.
The second stanza, as
I could understand, has not too good a muse attached. The beloved is
spared, for timebeing, from cutting her slacks, and instead her
backs are preferred to be targetted. The demand for rings, and songs seems
defeating the idea before hand. The poet may necessarily have some symbolic
treatment attached with it which seems to be far fetched conclusion to the
reader presently.
The third stanza is
keeping the dictating tone of the narrator intact. The beloved is denied of the
hope of happy journey. She is dictated to pay the fee incase she wants to keep
it going. The mention of fee suggests that the affair is not a pure one based
on mutual trust, but a mere bargaining,
and the beloved's pure love is facing blackmail at the hands of the greedy
lover. He asks her time and again the same introgative, "Can you handle
me? ", suggesting that she can never handle him, so it is better to leave
him and forget him.
The fourth stanza
keeps the mischievious tone of the narrator going. The lover here, puts a price tag to himself, and alarms his
beloved explaining that even when she could afford to buy him, she would
utterly fail to make him loyal to her. He being selfish to the core will erode
all of her leisure that too for no avail. He keeps busy creating fears and
apprehensions.
He tries his every
nerve to make her believe that he is not
too handsome, and that he is obsessed with spirits, so it is never possible to
handle him.
The poem projects a
merciless lover who enjoys teasing his beloved and makes hay. This is a good
addition and possibly a satire to the modern day affairs that usually harbours
the same intention but keeps the impression otherwise.
The poet has good
style to have his say said. He, however, needs to work harder to weed out the
lines defeating the argument.
Kudos to the poet.
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Story:2
A Voyage To The
Hearts
Tariq Ahmad Malik
Tariq Ahmad
Malik(Aatif)
It was his maiden
journey to the sea .The morning breezes were smoothening the otherwise rough
surfaces of the sea. The sea was as calm as the dead of the night .They were
fifty people boarded on the ship watching with curious eyes how the water
slipped past the ship. Thus sailed their ship on and on, without lending anyone
curiosity to look deeper in the water shells. Aatif’s attitude was no different
from the world that sailed with him to the Elephanta Caves. It was the voyage
of nine nautical miles across the sea from the Gate Way of India.
The other day Aatif
reached his work place. The voyage of the sea was still abuzz in his mind .He
was mindless of the fact that at his work place scores of little children,
brimmed with divine innocence ,had constantly been zooming their attention
towards him. Their eyes were all agleam with hope and trust , and their lips
bedecked with utmost curiosity for knowledge and wisdom. The irony of the
situation was that Aatif was not a bit interested in their endeavors. To him
theses little monsters were yet another burden on his fragile shoulders .He
talked to them thoughtlessly without showing any care for their sentiments.
The innocent cries
had ,however, found a breathing ground.
They would feel their tongues getting honey drenched by exclaiming the
name of their teacher. Every moment they would feel the distance being scaled
rapidly. Their teacher ,however, had failed to inspire them .He was least
bothered of the fact that these colourful birds had just left their nests. They
had left behind cradles, the lap of the
mothers, the warm beddings, the courtyard, and the rooms stuffed with colorful
toys. Aatif had,however, this much of realization that these children were
exploring every possibility to bring their teacher round. Under his nose, Aatif
would listen to the gossips of these children. Some little boy would narrate
how he got crossed with his mother when he had demanded pocket money.Little
girls would often complain of the
confrontations which their brothers warranted on them. Everyday some little
angel would gift Aatif some soiled apples.The malady ,however, persisted. Aatif
did hardly rate their sharing and caring with proper measures.
One evening
enlightenment came,and Aatif’s stream of consciousness was evoken. He could not
help recollecting the moments which the school children had gifted him.He
realized that their world knew only blessing and interestingly he was the pivot
of their world.Soon Aatif found his eyes getting wet with tears.He resolved to
become the ideal teacher for his ideal students.He waited impatiently to see
the new day dawning.
The next day the
transformation started .Aatif took his children to the playground, and made
them into a circle. He winged their arms flat and chained them together .A
thunder of laughter filled the environs.Aatif played “The Lion and The Goat”
with the children .At the end of the game all the little angles came and
flocked around their teacher and hugged him tight .This was the first time that
Aatif had felt some sweetness springing from the hearts of the children and
making the teacher feel the happiest creature of the whole world.
Aatif had now
discovered the offerings of his sharing and caring attitude.He started to
mingle with them every day and found them every inch receptive.If some body
would be absent ,he would now miss them badly.One day a student kept absent for
successive three days.The fourth day Aatif went to his home to know his
whereabouts.I saw his parents getting emotional on seeing the caring teacher at home.The parents started blessing
Aatif whole heartedly for the reason he
was caring their son to that extent.That day ,Aatif discovered that it worked
wonder when a teacher makes the parents believe that their son or daughter meant a word for him.He could
anow find a reason to believe that the parents could be convinced to be play
their role in nurturing the career of their children.
Aatif would now
believe that the children were by every definition ,a divine gift to the
mankind.Unlike the grownups ,children never compromised their innocence .The
innocence, purity, and sincerity was their hallmark. Their hatred,joulsy,and
prejudice,if any ,was short lived .It were they who made the teacher feel
special.
Aatif owed all his experience
in the profession of teaching to his students.There were now dozens of
incidents to recollect to this effect. He recalled one such incident.
One day he paid a
visit to a friend.His friend ,by that time, was not at home.His wife told Aatif
to wait for sometimes as he was expected to come within half an hour. Aatif
entered the main hall.He sat and kept waiting.Soon an eight year old girl
approached him with a half dozen dolls.She started playing with these
dolls.Aatif found a reason to talk to the girl,
“Which of the toys do
you love the most?”
The girl showed her a
broken doll ,and answered, “This is the doll which I love most.”
Aatif was confused
how a broken doll could be so dear to this child.He asked the girl the
reason.She answered with all innocence,
“If I don’t love this
wrecked doll, who else will love it?”
The response of the
innocent girl brought tears to his eyes.He had never tasted such an amount of
wisdom from such a little child before.He was now evoken to the new
reality.True is the philosophy that says Child is the father of man.Aatif
determined to dedicate all his time for the betterment of children.
How could Aatif make
the personality of his students shine, was now a million dollar exploration.He
resolved to put in endless efforts for his children.His chest would expand with
pride to see his students in action. He started to look for endeavors of his
children,and turned his efforts in that direction.
On his part ,Aatif
was now very particular about the children.He wanted to see them grooming into
advanced learners.He explored every possible opportunity to develop good
communication skills in his students.
Aatif drove his
students to debates, quiz shows, skits ,performing arts, and other workshops
.He started using morning assembly sessions for making students acquire
different skills. Morality and value friendly life style remained his priority.
Soon he saw the reflection of his efforts quite vividly in his children. He did
never believe in making favorites among students.He wanted all the teachers
should organize sharing sessions for the students .He believed that the sharing
sessions motivated the students to overcome their shyness. He kept golden bells
invariably ringing for them.The students would visit library quite often to see
Aatif passing directions. He had motivated them to have discussion sessions in
the library room.He kept a record of the students who inspired him with their
inborn talent, and tried to hone their talent.
He believed that
students be given to realize their potential, and be helped to absorb positive
self concept.He believed in discipline but never used the rod to prevent
mischievous activities.
This narrator
believes that Aatif would be still enjoying his enterprising aptitude
somewhere. His approach has now acquired good currency. Many of his students
have opted for teaching, and they are taking Aatif’s mission forward.
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Poem:5
Shahid Shafi's poem
His Land Is Kashmir
Revew by: Tariq Ahmad
Tariq
Asalaam Alikum.
I suppose every poet
treasures aestheticism. Poets know the art of exploring beauty of ideas. They
choose inspirations worth spreading, feelings worth sharing, and harbor words
which attract all the senses of the readers simultaneously. Poets never use
monotonous words. They shun the words which fail to convey the ideas in their
original occurrence. These words, like those of roses, seem to smell sweet at
the very first sight. Emotions carried around in the cart of unfamiliar diction
find poor respondents.
The great poets of
every age have believed in the simple diction. Wordsworth of the gone by ages,
and Maya Angelou of the present age need not the help of lexicons or thesauruses
to understand. Their message finds no transmission loss any where in the world.
I suppose the Kashmiri
born poets writing in English are tough to understand, than any of the native English poets.
Kashmiri poets, i suppose, fit ideas to the words having different connotations
and feel the work is done for them. They need , as i feel,to revisit their
approach and write heartfelt sentiments in the natural flow, they get birth in.
When I read the poem.
I see that the first stanza is simply a pack of phrases with out completion of
the idea.
The word
"is" is needed to be inserted before "frightened" to make
it a complete idea. The first stanza, even after making it connotative, still
fails to evoke response, or raise curiosity in the reader.
The second stanza
presents "a monster", gulping the youths. The boy presented in the
first stanza is made to repeat the same helplessness which he is destined with
in the first stanza. The monster is shown doing nothing to the boy. Here the narrator
leads from the front and paints the
helplessness of the boy on his canvas.
In the whole poem
'liquidation dreams', and 'monster' could have been developed into symbols, and
the reader could have found his role by making varied connotations; but the
poet has explained every thing before hand, and spoiled the texture of the poem
to the core.
Barring visual
images, the poem has nothing to showcase. The poem loses epigramic essence.
We all believe that
Words are just like
leaves, and
Where they most
abound
Much fruit of sense
is rarely found.
The prose version of
this poem can be even more concise than that of the poem itself.
Summary:
In a sorrowful night,
a run- away boy from an opressed land got frightened with his floating dreams.
An awful monister, in this land, would gulf the youth of this land. The boy at
seeing him started sobbing and chrushing teeth in desperation. The poet
notices, and simply potrays his helplessness on the canvas.
The poet has put his
best efforts. He, however, needs embrace a broader perspective to and prensent
his sentiments accordingly.
Good luck to the
poem..
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Poem:6
Analysis by
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Rafiabad Adbi Markaz
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Rafiabad Adbi Markaz
In the first place the
poem appears to have been written to suit the children's tastes. The poet has
done no ground work, has not found any striking idea worth spreading, but has
straight away started making the thread of seemingly rhyming words.
Yes, he has succeeded in doing so. The begining appears good. A symbolic treatment has been preffered at the outset, but the poet has got exposed very soon.
Starting the story from the apple tree. Where in, the bee flies and finds pleasant places, covered with wonders on either side.
Here in, keeping the perspective of bee at the back burner, the thread seems to be losing essence. The grammar has also been not taken due care of . "Enter "should have been "entered".
I found little children dive, they share love like close relations. This is totally some different idea that defeats the first one.
Then the succeeding lines
Yes, he has succeeded in doing so. The begining appears good. A symbolic treatment has been preffered at the outset, but the poet has got exposed very soon.
Starting the story from the apple tree. Where in, the bee flies and finds pleasant places, covered with wonders on either side.
Here in, keeping the perspective of bee at the back burner, the thread seems to be losing essence. The grammar has also been not taken due care of . "Enter "should have been "entered".
I found little children dive, they share love like close relations. This is totally some different idea that defeats the first one.
Then the succeeding lines
Down in the
grass............... height is found.
This couplet, if for the supposition's sake it is, has again no coherence and cohesion with the initially crafted idea.
This couplet, if for the supposition's sake it is, has again no coherence and cohesion with the initially crafted idea.
Dream being long
Could not not be compared to some beautiful song.
Could not not be compared to some beautiful song.
I wish to contrbute my
every day with kids of play,
makes no sense.
makes no sense.
Contribute towards the
kids at play could have been logically correct. Ideas are like fighters, this
phrase does also paralyse the logic.
The poem seems to be a square peg pushed into a round hole. The poet needs to learn the basics of the english poetry form, the style, the organic unity etc to groom himself into a good poet.
Hope the poet will emerge with vigor and vitality in his second attempt.
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
The poem seems to be a square peg pushed into a round hole. The poet needs to learn the basics of the english poetry form, the style, the organic unity etc to groom himself into a good poet.
Hope the poet will emerge with vigor and vitality in his second attempt.
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Tariq
Ahad Tariq
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By:Tariq ahmad malik
A Strange meeting’
Hello friends; I am Tariq, your
host, for the next fifteen minutes on a
strange journey. ’Well’, In the
still of this moon-lit evening, I have had the pleasure of recording the views
of the world’s leading writers and thinkers for our college magazine. To cash
in on this occasion, I have chosen a striking topic. It is none other than all
times attractive creature-‘woman’.
“In the beginning”, said a
Persian poet,” Allah took a rose, a lily, a dove, a serpent, a little honey, a
Dead-Sea apple, and a handful of clay. When he looked at the amalgam, it was a
woman”.
To begin with, my very first
question goes to Mr Nietzche. ‘Sir’- ‘would you please describe woman in your
own version’
Nietzche: God created woman, and boredom did indeed cease from that moment; but many other things ceased as well. Woman was God’s second mistake’.
Tariq: ‘Oh! What a tough stand. It is too confusing to see a woman through the eyes of a man. Between the two beholders, one sees vivacity in her and the other frailty. Let’s know what James Stephen thinks about women’.
James Stephen: ‘women are wiser than men, because they know less and understand more’.
Tariq: ‘Frailty, thy name is woman’. It is what Shakespeare has to say. Women have every right to denounce this claim. But, Mr Plutarch claims that his view about women is above controversy. Mr Plutarch, may we have the pleasure of knowing it.
Plutarch: Yes, my view reads, “when candles are out, all women are fair’’.
Tariq: O! no-
Plutarch: O! yes-
Tariq: Truth is in itself an evidence. Mr O. Henry is looking curious to add something. Lets know how he adds his head-load of twigs to the fire.
O.Henry: “I wish to disclose a secret this time, but don’t pass on these remarks to my wife.The secret is, if men knew how women pass the time when they are alone, they would never marry”.
Tariq: Oh ! no .
O.Henry: Oh! yes.
Tariq: Thomas Fuller’s heart is unmoved, even at seeing a gracious lady walking with a majestic gait. The man in him never stirs. Why is it so Mr Fuller.
Give woman thy whole heart, and
she will break it.
Tariq:What do you say to it, Mr Prestwich.
Prestwich: Nothing-but, thanks for quoting my couplet to me.
Tariq:Mr Prestwich ,I am your fan ,that is why I quoted you .Anyway, we have in between us a great personality who has lately been sandwitched between the affirmation and negation of women .He is none other than Mr Ceruantes Mr Ceruantes, please expose us to the tastes of this sandwitch.
Ceruantes: Between a woman’s yes and no, there is not room for a pin to go.
Tariq :Stolen looks would be the source of joy for Thomas Morre, when he was young. But now he has matured to the reality and holds a revised stand. Yes, Mr Morre Has women still the same fascination for you?
Thomas Morre: My old books were women’s looks
And folly was all they taught
me.
Tariq: What is beautiful and what is not only the beholder knows. But…what Mr Samuel Johnson knows about women is only known to him. ‘Yes’, Mr Johnson, please have your say about it.
Samuel Johnson: I am very fond of the company of ladies. I like their beauty. I like their delicacy .I like their vivacity ,and I like their silence.
Tariq: Wow! me too .Anyway my article is stuffed fully. It has been nice meeting you. Thanks for joining me.
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Nature Has For Me
By: Rafiya Syeed
By: Rafiya Syeed
When the
chanticleer signals the dawn
when the silent world wakes with yawn
when the frogs croak to flee,
that is the music nature has for me.
when the silent world wakes with yawn
when the frogs croak to flee,
that is the music nature has for me.
When the flowers
bloom with smile
when the nightingale sings with style
deep from the soil and on the tree,
That is the splendour nature has for me.
when the nightingale sings with style
deep from the soil and on the tree,
That is the splendour nature has for me.
When the sky is set
to pour the cloud
when lightning and thunder rumbles loud
in the spring a blessing so free,
that is the mettle nature has for me.
when lightning and thunder rumbles loud
in the spring a blessing so free,
that is the mettle nature has for me.
When the passerines
and raptors return to bed
when the sun set is radiant fiery red
up the hill and over the lea,
that is the calmness nature has for me.
when the sun set is radiant fiery red
up the hill and over the lea,
that is the calmness nature has for me.
When the paddy and
wheat are greenset
when the brook gushes down the fastest
in the fields and full of glee,
that is the faith nature has for me.
when the brook gushes down the fastest
in the fields and full of glee,
that is the faith nature has for me.
When the bright
stars twinkle with proud
when the moon peeps through the cloud
in the night and over the sea,
that is the victory nature has for me
when the moon peeps through the cloud
in the night and over the sea,
that is the victory nature has for me
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Analysis by:
Tariq Ahmad Tariq.
Analysis by:
Tariq Ahmad Tariq.
Respected Poet and
respected cretics,
[From a person who
reads, thinks, and writes only in kashmiri language. ]
With kind regards,
I want to put on records that on the day when this english
poem is posted on the literary page "Rafi Abad Adbi Markaz",
our english poets [cretics] have decreed the presedures of criticism with
reference to this poem and the poems expected to be posted here hence
forth.
It proclaims that we the analysts of oriental poetry genres are going conventional way.
It proclaims that we the analysts of oriental poetry genres are going conventional way.
Our say is, Yes we
go this way because the critic in the oriental literature is virtually a bridge
between the poets and the readers. The poets write from their intution, the
readers read to enjoy, read to comprehend and read to reach the core of the
idea that is presented. The poet uses devices to form different images in the
minds of the readers. He does make meaning difficult with conscious efforts and
calls it an art. An idea that could, otherwise, be presented in the plain text
is presented here through simile, metaphor, conceit, symbol, metonomy,
personification etc. What if the reader, by his own efforts, fails to reach the
poet's perspective. Who will bring him round if the cretic keeps himself
restricted to enjoying the poem without outlining the secret that helps
him enjoy the text.
With reference to
this poem, One of our english language poets says, "this poem reflects
simplicity, lucidity, and beautiful presentation of thought".
Another says, "Digging in the deeper meaning, does simply kill the beauty of the poem".
The third one says, "lets enjoy different discoveries of the poem by descending to phrasel criticism".
Another says, "Digging in the deeper meaning, does simply kill the beauty of the poem".
The third one says, "lets enjoy different discoveries of the poem by descending to phrasel criticism".
To me,
Yes, the poem is simple. Yes, it has a proper rhyme scheme in place. Yes, the poetess has her own style.
Yes, it is a well-made verbal object and, What an honour to the language!
Yes, a reality common to all has been given a vibrant treatment. A unique perspective;. so unique that it appears that it has never been said before.
The poetess has spelled out how she has found out the secrets of wonderful human values like those of music, splendour, calmness, mettle, faith and victory.
She has found music in the nature, in the roosters' crowing as well as in the frogs' croak. This music breaks the slumber of the silent world.
The poetess has attained grandeur from the flowers which smile while blooming and, she owes her style to the nightingale.
Her faith is strengthened at seeing the song birds as well as the prey birds returning to their nests by the sun set.
The poetess tastes victory at getting inspired when she realises that even the darkest night fails to restrict the stars from twinkling. Thick stretches of clouds utterly fail to restrict the moon from peeping through them.
Yes, the poem is simple. Yes, it has a proper rhyme scheme in place. Yes, the poetess has her own style.
Yes, it is a well-made verbal object and, What an honour to the language!
Yes, a reality common to all has been given a vibrant treatment. A unique perspective;. so unique that it appears that it has never been said before.
The poetess has spelled out how she has found out the secrets of wonderful human values like those of music, splendour, calmness, mettle, faith and victory.
She has found music in the nature, in the roosters' crowing as well as in the frogs' croak. This music breaks the slumber of the silent world.
The poetess has attained grandeur from the flowers which smile while blooming and, she owes her style to the nightingale.
Her faith is strengthened at seeing the song birds as well as the prey birds returning to their nests by the sun set.
The poetess tastes victory at getting inspired when she realises that even the darkest night fails to restrict the stars from twinkling. Thick stretches of clouds utterly fail to restrict the moon from peeping through them.
The poem is full of
visual images.
Silent world, a metaphor for sleeping people has nicely been carved.
The sky is set to pour, is a metanomy worth praising.
Silent world, a metaphor for sleeping people has nicely been carved.
The sky is set to pour, is a metanomy worth praising.
The poem is beautifully
rhythmed and rhymed. I will give 90 marks out of 100.The next 10 marks, i
reserve, for, there is always scope for improvement.
Great effort.
Great effort.
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Tariq Ahmad Tariq
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Poet: Shahid Shafi
Analysis by: Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Todays poem is a little
bit confusing for me. May be my intellect would be failing to pick the thread.
This poem has four
stanzas. The first stanza provides the setting. The third and the
fourth stanzas hired by flashback technique make the plot; the last
stanza brings forth the required conclusion.
It is said, if in a
certain play the first scene displays a gun hung on the wall; in the last scene
it has to fire. By going this approach the poem seems to open on the sad note.
The speaker has sleep-sick eyes. The night is in its darkest rage which makes
the otherwise bright eyes of the speaker assume the gloom worn look.The fox
wails at the end plaines adds to the haunting atmosphere outside and makes it more
grim. The speaker, however, tries to fill his eyes with happy
moments by recollecting how he had once spent a sleepless night at a cute inn
and had found a reason to fall in love.
The speaker does again
make setting in a way that connotes a diffetent story. The inn is decorated
with artificial flowers, ornamental furniture. There are soothing lights,
and a girl is displaying erotic gestures. She makes her maiden love speech and
the job of the speaker is done.He falls prey to the erotic gestures. He falls
in love with the girl.
Though the speaker calls
the moments spent at the inn very precious, he, however, fails to
call his love a spritual affair by dubbing the gestures of his girl
erotic. Thus the visit paid to the inn had extended him sensual enjoyment to
the core.
The dead dark night is
now in full rage, and it snatches from the speaker the joyful flashback.
The speaker realizes with pain that he is in deep trouble and can not deceive
the horrible night, and he does instead say goodbye to the sights which had
once offered him sensual pleasures to the tune that he never forgets.
The poem does not have
too much of novelity of ideas. There aren't too many shades of connotations.
Free verse technique has been used.Not too many poetic devices in view. The
poet has, however, justified the theme that "When in deep
waters, whimsies fail to land you at safer islands".
A good attempt.
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Poet: Syed Navreen Qadri
Tariq
Ahmad Tariq
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Poet: Ishfaq Baba
Analysis by: Tariq Ahmad Malik
Poem
Lonely journey for long
wait.
Dazzing tube light and my long stare.
Dazzing tube light and my long stare.
Jerking and clinking the
scary horn
The fear of spotless destination and my indomitable travel.
The fear of spotless destination and my indomitable travel.
My isolated gasping over
a lonely bench
But her calm voice of appreciation and care is worthy the thousand loves.
But her calm voice of appreciation and care is worthy the thousand loves.
Words no more define you
for me
Feelings no more justify my passion for you
Feelings no more justify my passion for you
I'm growing with you to
live the best
Haven't this God's mercy to me.
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By Ishfaq Baba
Haven't this God's mercy to me.
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By Ishfaq Baba
Analysis:
By: Tariq Ahmad Malik
By: Tariq Ahmad Malik
The poet visualises
"wait" as a vast desert which he travels all alone. Being aloof in
the wilderness of the desert fills his mind with the clouds of fear, and
he sees frightful horns of some black monister looming before his eyes . These
horns make continuous jerks and produce haunting noises.
The poet, determined to
go across the desert of wait, finds his destination clueless. He finds late a bench
lying as lonely as the poet himself, and sits on it for a while . Here he
realises that love invariably means to toil hard for winning the heart of the
companion. He realises that his companion certainly deserves much more than
these hardships brone by the poet. He believes that some calm voice . Is
hovering over and appreciating him. His inner voice bespeaks saying
"his companions is worthy the thousand loves". All this helps the
poet enjoy the journey in the hope that it will be rewarded when he reaches
the destination.
The pattern of the poem
demands that the poem be read line by line. The poem touches the
centuries old 'subject' but the poet has tried to give it a novel treatment.
The poem has, definitely, its organic unity intact. The diction is simple and
poetic. The reader extracts pleasure in the first instance and wisdom towards
the end.
Complements for the
poet
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
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MEMORIES IX
I remember!
That blithe moment
When fluidity of night dropped in the bay of your orbs,
Comingling with the mercurial salinity there,
And those red roses of dreams flowered
On the parched soil of one of its margins,
On sly;
That blithe moment
When fluidity of night dropped in the bay of your orbs,
Comingling with the mercurial salinity there,
And those red roses of dreams flowered
On the parched soil of one of its margins,
On sly;
I remember!
When hazy muzzy moonbeams
Kissed the colourful petals of those rosy dreams,
Making them ooze out beads of sweat
With their coruscunt chilly sheen;
When hazy muzzy moonbeams
Kissed the colourful petals of those rosy dreams,
Making them ooze out beads of sweat
With their coruscunt chilly sheen;
I remember!
When all the waves in that bay
Danced to the tunes of the fall and rise
of your sable eyelids,
And every dream, turning turbulent, lay so heavy
On the feeble bosom of the night;
When all the waves in that bay
Danced to the tunes of the fall and rise
of your sable eyelids,
And every dream, turning turbulent, lay so heavy
On the feeble bosom of the night;
I remember!
When at the end of this drama whole
The pain surfaced bubbling on all the petals,
And entered into the eternal wedlock
With my fallible being.
When at the end of this drama whole
The pain surfaced bubbling on all the petals,
And entered into the eternal wedlock
With my fallible being.
Copyright Wani Nazir
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Analysis by Tariq Ahmad Malik
Our poet of the day
might be thinking that his poetry is finding virtually no takers.
I suppose we, the poetry
lovers of the valley who give vent to our feelings in our native language, find
it difficult to analyse english poetry using oriental measures.
While analysing kashmiri
or urdu poetry we start with meter. We prefer poetry set to a particular meter.
Next, we look for
how lucidly the poet has used the figurative language. We surprise our readers
by helping him Visualise the connotations underling our content. For doing this
we use the simplest possible diction.
We, the poets of
kashmiri language want that our reader should enjoy reading us. We target his
heart using metaphors, similes, symbols, personifications, pun, etc that
our reader already knows. We decline to lend him stress on his intellect.
Now reading this poem,
to telk the truth, was a painful experience for me. The theme is
ambigues; Connotations hard to make, and words alien to the readers eye.
If i am asked what i have
understood the poem is about, i may put put my findings as follows...
The poet seems to be
recollecting some happy moment when he had felt that the night, out of her
fluidity, had gifted his beloved some drops of salty water to suffice for her
tears. He has the belief that the bewitching eyes of hers have every reason to
bloom rosy dreams in the otherwise dry soil of his heart. He does feel that his
heart is now delicate enough to hold the petals of his dream intact.
The poet remembers how
faint beams of moon keep kissing the bosom of the petals of his dream and make
them ooze out dew drops as their cold shinng sweat.
The eyes of the beloved
appear as a tumultious bay where the waves find momantum, owing to the
blinking of the dark black eye lids. The poet experiences the changing course
of dreams during the dead of the night.
The poet, ultimately,
remembers how petals, ultimately, lost their colour and met the decay the way
all human being meet.
Thus the poet ends the
poem with a sad tone.
The poem may find many interpretations, but for me it is "what the eye met and the heart felt"
Tariq Ahmad Malik
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Word of appreciation for
Raffiabad Adbimarkaz member
The poem may find many interpretations, but for me it is "what the eye met and the heart felt"
Tariq Ahmad Malik
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Word of appreciation for
Raffiabad Adbimarkaz member
by Tariq Ahmad Tariq
It has been a nice
experience to see many of our critics trying to decode a poem that was seeming
woven in multiple threads. It gave a tough time to our friends to reach the
message of the poem. The poetic devices were not easy to figure out and the
summary statement for the poem was really a challage, for, the imagery that was
surfacing on the nerves was quite deceiving.
I suppose the poem was demanding some indepth philosophical bent in the reader which we usually are not giving too much weightage to.
The poet deserves the compliments, for, his imiginative insight made us sway in the swarms of the emotions for hours together.
I am happy that because of this poem we were able to have a rainbow gathering around us. We were never sure that we have good poets in English; so was our conception about the good readership of english literature. Thanks to the oppertunity we created yesterday in presenting a seemingly a budding poet from kashmir's saffron town. We could have never found the reviews about english literature, had we not given it a chance. Thank God we have now a good bench strenght for atleast 3 language on this page. We expect that the members of this page will invariably help us stay together for the sake of language and literature.
I suppose the poem was demanding some indepth philosophical bent in the reader which we usually are not giving too much weightage to.
The poet deserves the compliments, for, his imiginative insight made us sway in the swarms of the emotions for hours together.
I am happy that because of this poem we were able to have a rainbow gathering around us. We were never sure that we have good poets in English; so was our conception about the good readership of english literature. Thanks to the oppertunity we created yesterday in presenting a seemingly a budding poet from kashmir's saffron town. We could have never found the reviews about english literature, had we not given it a chance. Thank God we have now a good bench strenght for atleast 3 language on this page. We expect that the members of this page will invariably help us stay together for the sake of language and literature.
Sincerely yours
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
Tariq Ahmad Tariq
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"Fake Is A
Poet" by Ramoozi Bekhudi
Analysis by : Tariq
Ahmad Malik
Behrampora Rafiabad.
[09/02 9:40 pm]
Fake is a poet
fake is all he lives
You should know
something
before falling in love
with the poet
the fake poet
Love him enough
he shall still look for
voids in his being
and sing songs of
incompleteness
(songs of a world which
he thinks
is beyond love)
as if nothing can bring
him back to life
not even your most
passionate kiss
your velvet hands
would try and fail
and still try and fail
to pull him out of his
inertia of gloom.
show him your scars,
he will call it fate
make him your fate
he will mould, remould,
kneed, throw
and bounce you as per
his whims
like a baby does to his
first handful of dough
Dont love him back, dont
reciprocate
see him assemble suns
and stars
at the sole of your
feet, to warm your heart
to light up your eyes
he shall only talk of
love
as if loving you is the
only act of worship
and you are his demigod
he will conspire
conspire to yeild melody
from flowers
and fragrance from your
words
and will manipulate
all seasons to suit your
moods
he shall compare the
dust of your bylanes
with the sacred friday
kohl of his eyes
he cant be owned
he isnt a whole
he is a consolidation
of many lives, dreams,
emotions, nothingness
he doesnt belong to
himself
he belongs to the
process of consolidation
Fake is a poet
Fake is all he writes.
Rumuz E Bekhudi
~~~ahad e rafaqat theek
hai lekin......
07-02-17
[09/02 9:41 pm] Tariq
Ahmad Malik: I have tried to analyse this poem
[09/02 9:41 pm] Tariq
Ahmad Malik: This poem apparently follows the rhythm of natural speech. The
poet has used extended metaphor and explained 'a poet' being fake. The poet has
lavishly used poetic techniques to prove her claim. The metanomy in the second
line followed by the restatement towards the end of the stanza helps her make
her point strong.
The poet has, next,
tried to convey how self-centric the poet[the poet in the poem] is by
presenting a contrast how he fails to accomodate somebody's love for him. He
persists in his plaintive whimsies and denies to taste the nude life. The poet,
next, dubbs him as a brute traitor who believes in manupulations. He makes
flowers moan, and those of words spread scent. By keeping depressed he
spoils the sweetness of the seasons. The height of his ego is manifested when
he keeps the dust and the coveted kohl in the same tray. The poet restates
towards the end that 'the poet' ceases to belong himself, how come he own the
world.
The poetess has drawn
good conclusions. She describes one person who is a poet. The phrase 'a poet',
means some one poet. May be she herself;. May be some poet she knows. She has
made honest introspection how human differ in word and deed. Hers is a poem
[satire], not a sermon. Her sponteanous overflow of emotions deserve our
appalauses for her being original.
Long ago Coleridge
braved to write his lines on the same topic -
Sir, i admit your
general rule,
That every poet is a
fool,
But you yourself may
serve to show,
That every fool is not a
poet.
Present generation of
poets try hard to keep art and life poles apart. Respecting this rule,
the poetic piece needs to take us to wonderlands but need not necessarily allow
us stay there. The poet and the poetry need not necessarily be the same. It can
some times be a mirror image.
From a classroom teacher
Tariq Ahmad Malik
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Poem
THE BATH OF FLOOD
By: Mir Rooshan Khayal
By: Mir Rooshan Khayal
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Bewildering
with every rain drop
The wick of the lamp in
the dark
Still was disclosing
that
Not only his things of
retinue
Have been given to the
Wind
But the ascending waters
have
Crooked his ever erected
head
Not only drenched his
exalted home
But also his lofty
estacy.
He had chaned his
knees
He was praying to God
Like the previous
supplications
This was not an alloy
Not an alloy of businesses
trick
And an act of pretence.
It was a cry of man in
want
Reflecting the every
glare of candour.
The water although was
turbid
Had washed his self
conciet .
The light from whip
although foggy
Had enlightened him
And Vanished his folly.
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Analysis by Tariq Ahmad Tariq
The poem has been
planted in a sad tone.
The word bewildering
exposes the scenario before hand.The poem doen't have any punctuation marks
that creates different shades distint from one another.
"Bewildering" and
"disclosing" are human traits given to the wick of lamp ,and thus
personification immersed in visual imagery is magnified.
"Not only his
things of retinue have been given to the wind"
The statement seems to
be losely connected to the thread.Who is the invisible agent ,is not clear. The
effect of wind is not created.
"Crooked his ever
erected head"
Is forcibly made to
connote that before these floods, the man would never demonstrate his humble
nature.
I also fail to figure
out the connotations of "to change ones knees".
"The water though
was turbid has washed his self conciet" .Here the conjuction 'though' is
not followed with a powerful contrast. Turbid water has utterly failed as a
metaphor.
The poet has tried his
level to create a telling effect with a resounding imagery of flood but he
should have focused a little more on the word painting.
Over all good effort.
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Tariq
Ahmad Tariq
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When the poet and the
reader meet, expect the re-definition of miracles.
By: Tariq Ahmad Malik(The Reader).
On ‘woman’s day 2017’
a literary page was abuzz with the posts favouring the woman folk. A female
poet, in the meanwhile posted the following poem….
Poem.
Your violence shall
become
my poem some day..
my world knows
only of love
there are many
worlds
to welcome soot
the bruises you gifted me -scatter fragrance
the chains you tied me in
the bruises you gifted me -scatter fragrance
the chains you tied me in
-are grape wines now
the loneliness you left me to
the loneliness you left me to
-is the doorsill to
Kaaba
the tears you made me shed
the tears you made me shed
-suffice for a
nightlong ablution
the graveyard where you buried my dreams
the graveyard where you buried my dreams
-has jasmines and
irises and hyacinths blossomed all over
Your violence shall only become
Your violence shall only become
my poem some day
Strange is my world,
Strange is my world,
the world of mad-men
where
the roses bloom
-in barren lands
sunflowers crave
for
-a moonlight bath
peacocks dance
in
-snowstorms and
nightingales sing
-the songs of
redemption
Your violence shall only become
Your violence shall only become
my poem some day
we are all but
we are all but
Parts of that Whole
equal parts,
powerless parts,
ephemeral parts
no part can
exert
violence on any other
part
violence is forgetfulness
violence is forgetfulness
-of being a part
love is being mindful
love is being mindful
– of that supreme
Whole
Your violence shall only become
Your violence shall only become
my poem some day
don't fret my dear
don't fret my dear
come, lets swirl
here none shall make fun of our worn out selves.
~Rumuz
~Rumuz
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While reading the
poem, the readers gathered courage to ask the poet why has she painted the
negative picture of men on the very day when men are busy adoring the role of
woman in making the world a better place. Here is what transpired.
The Reader: The poem starts with the phrase
Your violence, a very
harsh tone against man. Then as the narrative develops the man is dubbed as
gifting the woman violence, bruises, chains, loneliness, tears, grave-yard etc
Then. conclusion
“strange is the world of mad-man”.
Why doesn’t any female
poet start the narrative right from “the fall of man”… may be she will have to
consider the narration afresh.
What an irony!
Men adore woman
every possible way. They celebrate the days in her name, make diverse
efforts to empower her. They try to win her confidence. They tint her into
Habba khatoon, Arni maal, lalded, Parveen Shakir etc. They keep on
swearing that woman-folk is beautiful; and beautiful is the way they walk
on.
When a women poet
responds to man’s sentiments she deliberately chooses to downgrade the role of
man and denies any sympathy for them.
Let the men clap over
this plight.
What is the say of the poet on this?
What is the say of the poet on this?
The female poet: Before responding to your query sir, I
would really want to know your views regarding this poem of Sahir Ludhianvi and
how do you see it .
Aurat ne janam diya mardon ko
Mardon ne use bazaar
diya
Jab dil chaaha
masla-kuchla
Jab ji chaaha dhutkaar
diya
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Tulti hai kahin dinaaron mein
Tulti hai kahin dinaaron mein
Bikti hai kahin
bazaaron mein
Nangi nachvaayi jaati
hai
Ayyashon ke darbaaron
mein
Yeh woh beizzat cheez
hai jo
Bant jaati hai
izzatdaaron mein
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Mardon ke liye har zulm ravaan
Mardon ke liye har zulm ravaan
Aurat ke liye rona bhi
khataa
Mardon ke liye laakhon
sejein
Aurat ke liye bas ek
chita
Mardon ke liye har
aish ka haq
Aurat ke liye jeena
bhi sazaa
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Jin hothon ne unko pyaar kiya
Jin hothon ne unko pyaar kiya
Un hothon ka vyopaar
kiya
Jis kokh mein inka
jism dhala
Us kokh ka kaarobaar
kiya
Jis tan se uge kopal
bankar
Us tan ko
zaleel-o-khaar kiya
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Mardon ne banaayi jo rasme
Mardon ne banaayi jo rasme
Unko haq ka farmaan
kaha
Aurat ke zinda jalne
ko
Qurbaani aur balidaan
kaha
Ismat ke badle roti di
Aur usko bhi ehsaan
kaha
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Sansar ki har ek besharmi
Sansar ki har ek besharmi
Gurbat ki god mein
palti hai
Chaklon hi mein aakar
rukti hai
Faaqon se jo raah
nikalti hai
Mardon ki hawas hai jo
aksar
Aurat ke paap mein
dhalti hai
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
Aurat sansar ki kismet hai
Aurat sansar ki kismet hai
Phir bhi taqdeer ki
heti hai
Autaar-payambar janti
hai
Phir bhi shaitan ki
beti hai
Yeh woh badkismat maa
hai jo
Beton ki sej pe leti
hai
Aurat ne janam diya
mardon ko
The Reader:
Madam, It sounds good that you stand to resist. My words were not an
attack to you. I simply invited the men-poets to have courage “to call a spade
a spade”. You are a promising poet. You know I joined this page the time when
your poem “Fake is a poet” was sent to me for analysis. I did, not
only, analyse it my way but did also add it in my blog to let it live its full
life.
To my humble
understanding, Sahir Ludhyanivi’s poem reflects the plight of the woman who had
denied to accept the bridle of religion in her jaws. By then the prostitutes
did mostly belong to Muslim community. “Amrav Jan Ada” reflects the narrative
more vividly.
Why shouldn’t we start
from the time when our beloved prophet(SAW), cut the chains of slavery for women.
Why shouldn’t we recall the time when “Ama Aashia” was made the Mufti Azam of
the Ummah. Our eyes see what our mind allows them to see.
Hope you understand.
The Female poet: I was expecting your comments on Sahirs poem
which also starts with “Mardon ne usse bazaar diya”.
Anyways. Certain humble submissions:
Anyways. Certain humble submissions:
Women are perhaps more
in need of special and discrete spaces where they are heard rather than any
particular day where they are ‘celebrated’. Observing Hangul day doesnt save it
from becoming endangered
Poetry helps one to overcome a certain degree of powerlessness, now if even that medium of expression is strangulated, that is what results in “literary terrorism”.
Unfortunately you have missed the grand narrative of “violence” in the poem. Its perhaps a result of hasty reading, unnecessary insecurity, preconceived notions about poetry from a certain gender or lack of comprehension. Why do I say lack of comprehension because nowhere in the poem the word “man” is used. U recklessly attributed violence to “man” . If you analyse the poem again, you would know that its about a common response from the weaker to the stronger. Its a response against violence-of all sorts.
Please don't make a man vs women thing.
Poetry helps one to overcome a certain degree of powerlessness, now if even that medium of expression is strangulated, that is what results in “literary terrorism”.
Unfortunately you have missed the grand narrative of “violence” in the poem. Its perhaps a result of hasty reading, unnecessary insecurity, preconceived notions about poetry from a certain gender or lack of comprehension. Why do I say lack of comprehension because nowhere in the poem the word “man” is used. U recklessly attributed violence to “man” . If you analyse the poem again, you would know that its about a common response from the weaker to the stronger. Its a response against violence-of all sorts.
Please don't make a man vs women thing.
The Reader: My first submission is,
let we have work done with good humor.
My prick dripped its
way into a healthy discussion. Let it be not wasted in mere arguments.
You are absolutely
right in saying it is not man v/s woman.
I agree. But the
readers will not always read according to the perspective of the poet. Readers
have their own perspective. Your words become poetry when you allow them to
have a safe “transition from denotations to connotations”. As a reader i made
the poem go my way.
If Sahir, a great
poet, gathers the courage to count the high handedness of men on women;. why
can’t a woman poet take the thread from him and come with the narrations of
women’s cruelty, if any..
The Female poet: The text is absolutely out of my hand
and I would happily accept all the criticism made on what has been done rather
than what ought to be done. We should analyse an artist’s piece of art, in the
form it has been brought forward rather than how should it have been done. If
its so, then the critic himself tries to be a creator.
What you expect women poets to do is a collective responsibility which falls on everyone’s shoulders if at all its really required. I am really intrigued about that “idea whose time has come”.
If I may have read it right, your resentment was to the fact that I didn't post a “thank you poem” for people celebrating a day I don't believe in, calling women and her ways beautiful which is absolute objectification to me, empowering women -when I see her narratives being tweaked in all social and so called literary circles, tinting her as Habba and Parveen but not expecting the similar thematic responses from her.
In my opinion the time is ripe when we respect and celebrate womanhood exactly for the same reasons we celebrate manhood, childhood or old age. Simply for her being a human being, a representative of mankind.
Please spare my poor selection of words which may not convey what exactly I intend to. As you said the intention is learning rather than bringing one another down.
What you expect women poets to do is a collective responsibility which falls on everyone’s shoulders if at all its really required. I am really intrigued about that “idea whose time has come”.
If I may have read it right, your resentment was to the fact that I didn't post a “thank you poem” for people celebrating a day I don't believe in, calling women and her ways beautiful which is absolute objectification to me, empowering women -when I see her narratives being tweaked in all social and so called literary circles, tinting her as Habba and Parveen but not expecting the similar thematic responses from her.
In my opinion the time is ripe when we respect and celebrate womanhood exactly for the same reasons we celebrate manhood, childhood or old age. Simply for her being a human being, a representative of mankind.
Please spare my poor selection of words which may not convey what exactly I intend to. As you said the intention is learning rather than bringing one another down.
Peace.
The Reader: Suggestion granted, Since ages
people have been calling the yes-men good for nothing. But you have words to
inspire and courage to resist, it sounds great.
I believe you will,
one day, dub these moments very inspiring when you will recollect to
yourself how one day you faced a seemingly merciless reader. I believe you will
one day earn a good name as a poet;but what about the reader like me who has
never been a poet but a promising reader for good poets. I am humble enough to
praise every good effort;. let the poets choose whether to give any credit to
the readers who help them maintain high standards.
Peace!
Thankzzz
Finally peace process
could be spelled out by the joint efforts of the poet and the reader.
Conclusion:
When the poet and the
reader collide, expect the re-definition of miracles.
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Tariq Ahmad Malik
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MONDAY, 13 JUNE 2016
Pleasures of Reading
By: Tariq Ahmad Malik
Books are the most wonderful of all the inventions of man.with out them all human wisdom would have lost. But for them man would have no sense of history, and he would have to pursue every goal by starting from nothingness. Thank God, This is mere an assumption.
Books lend us indomitable mind power. They bestow us with a renewed
imagination .They impart us knowledge, and by investing our time in knowledge we are fetched the best interest. Book reading makes human mind peaceful, and a peaceful mind generates power. Books , when read with zeal and zest, make a man ‘man of value’ .Such a life lasts and denies the death. Books guide us how to fish, and feed us through out the life. Books shape our mental culture. Books are some times discredited as immoral. Such books do, actually show the world its shame.
Among all hobbies ,book reading is the wisest choice. The wise use of leisure time is, by now, a million dollar problem. Most of the humans descend to kill this precious time. Killing time, according to philosophers, is not a murder, but a suicide. Reading habits can save us from committing this crime.
Some times, when we claim that reading imparts pleasure, the question arises what psychological phenomenon can be termed as pleasure. Does pleasure connote the satisfaction of certain desire? Yes. We are endowed with many means to satisfy our cardinal and spiritual desires, and time is one among them. If time is termed as- [a] prime time and [b]leisure time. The prime time has to be used to earn living while as the leisure for pursuing hobbies. Reading in this respect is a mega leisure choice.
Reading always works wonder. It helps us make intelligent use of leisure. It helps us grow our talent. It extends us a vision and help us do the impossible.
Reading makes us abreast of worldly affairs and there of various challenges the world
faces. Reading works towards making us full men. By marshaling upon the handy information of books, we can make a smooth go on the path of innovation.
Reading shapes our opinion, and saves us from aimless running on wrong roads. It makes us aim specific, single minded, and dedicated .Reading makes us grow optimistic. It helps us see from the lock ups of stress and strain only stars rather than mud.It is said that prejudice is the child of ignorance. A well-read person is, then, washed off of prejudice and bias. In most cases the people who hold books dear have least time to worry. Thus reading substitutes work for worry.
Reading brushes up our memory. It helps us cash in on the experiences of the men who have make a mark in their lives.Reading paves us for finding their feet on the sands of time.
Specific reading determines our ambition. There are books related to every faculty which have currency in the practical world. Man only needs to choose them to excel his mettle. The news papers, economic journals, Science magazines, political journals, and magazines on poetry and literature etc make the reader up to date with the present day competition.
Reading imparts confidence. It makes us believe that even the great people had been beset with problems and challenges, and that they had fallen many a time, but their greatness could sustain by rising every time they fell. Books lend us the conviction that great things are done when men and mountains meet, they are not
done by jostling in street.
Reading is such an investment that has no diminishing returns, no market risks. It has high credit worthiness. All success stories unveil the fact that great achievers have essentially a good taste of reading. The I.A.S toppers, despite achieving their coveted goals often complain that they could not do justice with reading. They do dub it their
biggest mistake.
Time and again, it is proved that the people who are not used to reading are disqualified for living a worthwhile life. Their dreams of becoming titans are always chocked.
It is book reading which exposes us to the annals of our past glory. By reading the classicals, we learn how human civilizations have sustained the whirlpools of the natural calamities and political traumas, and reached the present day state of affairs. Books teach us to doubt, to inquire and then to discover the validity of the findings .this systematic approach has been the routine of all great thinkers. Books ,as selfless friends, make us carefree. They work for our betterment without asking for rewards. They only want us to attend them attentively, and with full meditation. Books never misguide us . they show us our shame in order that we correct our selves. They attune us with wisdom and enlightenment. They keep us far from the unconvincing temptations of madding crowds.
Books teach us to act with positive approach. they encourage us to be courageous. They keep our morale high.
Book reading enthuse us to grow our own height no matter how tall our grand parents had been.
Reading shapes our personality. It nurtures our wit. It carves of us quick witted orators who spellbound the listeners with their wedding bells. The well-read
people maintain the vivacity of language. They prove to the world that nothing in this world is as alive as a word.Their attitude with structuring the sentences , their idiomic style,their brevity,and their caressing of figures of speech make the language a sensation. Our attitude and aptitude towards reading ultimately determine our altitude in society.
To conclude ,it may be safely said that reading makes a full man ,conference a ready man, and writing an exact man. The profession of teachers, lawyers, judges etc will come to a stand still if they stop reading books. The students grow elite in the company of books only .It is only by dint of reading that Japan has grown their human capital to the sensational heights. To cut the story short we may conclude with saying that all of us can not become great, but all of us can attach our selves to something that is great. Why not that thing be reading when we have conviction that reading is a million dollar blessing.
By:Tariq Ahmad Malik
Rafiabad
Books are the most wonderful of all the inventions of man.with out them all human wisdom would have lost. But for them man would have no sense of history, and he would have to pursue every goal by starting from nothingness. Thank God, This is mere an assumption.
Books lend us indomitable mind power. They bestow us with a renewed
imagination .They impart us knowledge, and by investing our time in knowledge we are fetched the best interest. Book reading makes human mind peaceful, and a peaceful mind generates power. Books , when read with zeal and zest, make a man ‘man of value’ .Such a life lasts and denies the death. Books guide us how to fish, and feed us through out the life. Books shape our mental culture. Books are some times discredited as immoral. Such books do, actually show the world its shame.
Among all hobbies ,book reading is the wisest choice. The wise use of leisure time is, by now, a million dollar problem. Most of the humans descend to kill this precious time. Killing time, according to philosophers, is not a murder, but a suicide. Reading habits can save us from committing this crime.
Some times, when we claim that reading imparts pleasure, the question arises what psychological phenomenon can be termed as pleasure. Does pleasure connote the satisfaction of certain desire? Yes. We are endowed with many means to satisfy our cardinal and spiritual desires, and time is one among them. If time is termed as- [a] prime time and [b]leisure time. The prime time has to be used to earn living while as the leisure for pursuing hobbies. Reading in this respect is a mega leisure choice.
Reading always works wonder. It helps us make intelligent use of leisure. It helps us grow our talent. It extends us a vision and help us do the impossible.
Reading makes us abreast of worldly affairs and there of various challenges the world
faces. Reading works towards making us full men. By marshaling upon the handy information of books, we can make a smooth go on the path of innovation.
Reading shapes our opinion, and saves us from aimless running on wrong roads. It makes us aim specific, single minded, and dedicated .Reading makes us grow optimistic. It helps us see from the lock ups of stress and strain only stars rather than mud.It is said that prejudice is the child of ignorance. A well-read person is, then, washed off of prejudice and bias. In most cases the people who hold books dear have least time to worry. Thus reading substitutes work for worry.
Reading brushes up our memory. It helps us cash in on the experiences of the men who have make a mark in their lives.Reading paves us for finding their feet on the sands of time.
Specific reading determines our ambition. There are books related to every faculty which have currency in the practical world. Man only needs to choose them to excel his mettle. The news papers, economic journals, Science magazines, political journals, and magazines on poetry and literature etc make the reader up to date with the present day competition.
Reading imparts confidence. It makes us believe that even the great people had been beset with problems and challenges, and that they had fallen many a time, but their greatness could sustain by rising every time they fell. Books lend us the conviction that great things are done when men and mountains meet, they are not
done by jostling in street.
Reading is such an investment that has no diminishing returns, no market risks. It has high credit worthiness. All success stories unveil the fact that great achievers have essentially a good taste of reading. The I.A.S toppers, despite achieving their coveted goals often complain that they could not do justice with reading. They do dub it their
biggest mistake.
Time and again, it is proved that the people who are not used to reading are disqualified for living a worthwhile life. Their dreams of becoming titans are always chocked.
It is book reading which exposes us to the annals of our past glory. By reading the classicals, we learn how human civilizations have sustained the whirlpools of the natural calamities and political traumas, and reached the present day state of affairs. Books teach us to doubt, to inquire and then to discover the validity of the findings .this systematic approach has been the routine of all great thinkers. Books ,as selfless friends, make us carefree. They work for our betterment without asking for rewards. They only want us to attend them attentively, and with full meditation. Books never misguide us . they show us our shame in order that we correct our selves. They attune us with wisdom and enlightenment. They keep us far from the unconvincing temptations of madding crowds.
Books teach us to act with positive approach. they encourage us to be courageous. They keep our morale high.
Book reading enthuse us to grow our own height no matter how tall our grand parents had been.
Reading shapes our personality. It nurtures our wit. It carves of us quick witted orators who spellbound the listeners with their wedding bells. The well-read
people maintain the vivacity of language. They prove to the world that nothing in this world is as alive as a word.Their attitude with structuring the sentences , their idiomic style,their brevity,and their caressing of figures of speech make the language a sensation. Our attitude and aptitude towards reading ultimately determine our altitude in society.
To conclude ,it may be safely said that reading makes a full man ,conference a ready man, and writing an exact man. The profession of teachers, lawyers, judges etc will come to a stand still if they stop reading books. The students grow elite in the company of books only .It is only by dint of reading that Japan has grown their human capital to the sensational heights. To cut the story short we may conclude with saying that all of us can not become great, but all of us can attach our selves to something that is great. Why not that thing be reading when we have conviction that reading is a million dollar blessing.
By:Tariq Ahmad Malik
Rafiabad
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