Nature Has For Me
By: Rafiya Syeed
By: Rafiya Syeed
When the chanticleer signals the dawn
when the silent world wakes with yawn
when the frogs croak to flee,
that is the music nature has for me.
when the silent world wakes with yawn
when the frogs croak to flee,
that is the music nature has for me.
When the flowers bloom with smile
when the nightingale sings with style
deep from the soil and on the tree,
That is the splendour nature has for me.
when the nightingale sings with style
deep from the soil and on the tree,
That is the splendour nature has for me.
When the sky is set to pour the cloud
when lightning and thunder rumbles loud
in the spring a blessing so free,
that is the mettle nature has for me.
when lightning and thunder rumbles loud
in the spring a blessing so free,
that is the mettle nature has for me.
When the passerines and raptors return to bed
when the sun set is radiant fiery red
up the hill and over the lea,
that is the calmness nature has for me.
when the sun set is radiant fiery red
up the hill and over the lea,
that is the calmness nature has for me.
When the paddy and wheat are greenset
when the brook gushes down the fastest
in the fields and full of glee,
that is the faith nature has for me.
when the brook gushes down the fastest
in the fields and full of glee,
that is the faith nature has for me.
When the bright stars twinkle with proud
when the moon peeps through the cloud
in the night and over the sea,
that is the victory nature has for me
when the moon peeps through the cloud
in the night and over the sea,
that is the victory nature has for me
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Analysis by:
Tariq Ahmad Tariq.
Analysis by:
Tariq Ahmad Tariq.
Respected Poet and respected cretics,
[From a person who reads, thinks, and writes only in kashmiri language. ]
With kind regards, I want to put on records that on the day when this english poem is posted on the literary page "Rafi Abad Adbi Markaz", our english poets [cretics] have decreed the presedures of criticism with reference to this poem and the poems expected to be posted here hence forth.
It proclaims that we the analysts of oriental poetry genres are going conventional way.
It proclaims that we the analysts of oriental poetry genres are going conventional way.
Our say is, Yes we go this way because the critic in the oriental literature is virtually a bridge between the poets and the readers. The poets write from their intution, the readers read to enjoy, read to comprehend and read to reach the core of the idea that is presented. The poet uses devices to form different images in the minds of the readers. He does make meaning difficult with conscious efforts and calls it an art. An idea that could, otherwise, be presented in the plain text is presented here through simile, metaphor, conceit, symbol, metonomy, personification etc. What if the reader, by his own efforts, fails to reach the poet's perspective. Who will bring him round if the cretic keeps himself restricted to enjoying the poem without outlining the secret that helps him enjoy the text.
With reference to this poem, One of our english language poets says, "this poem reflects simplicity, lucidity, and beautiful presentation of thought".
Another says, "Digging in the deeper meaning, does simply kill the beauty of the poem".
The third one says, "lets enjoy different discoveries of the poem by descending to phrasel criticism".
Another says, "Digging in the deeper meaning, does simply kill the beauty of the poem".
The third one says, "lets enjoy different discoveries of the poem by descending to phrasel criticism".
To me,
Yes, the poem is simple. Yes, it has a proper rhyme scheme in place. Yes, the poetess has her own style.
Yes, it is a well-made verbal object and, What an honour to the language!
Yes, a reality common to all has been given a vibrant treatment. A unique perspective;. so unique that it appears that it has never been said before.
The poetess has spelled out how she has found out the secrets of wonderful human values like those of music, splendour, calmness, mettle, faith and victory.
She has found music in the nature, in the roosters' crowing as well as in the frogs' croak. This music breaks the slumber of the silent world.
The poetess has attained grandeur from the flowers which smile while blooming and, she owes her style to the nightingale.
Her faith is strengthened at seeing the song birds as well as the prey birds returning to their nests by the sun set.
The poetess tastes victory at getting inspired when she realises that even the darkest night fails to restrict the stars from twinkling. Thick stretches of clouds utterly fail to restrict the moon from peeping through them.
Yes, the poem is simple. Yes, it has a proper rhyme scheme in place. Yes, the poetess has her own style.
Yes, it is a well-made verbal object and, What an honour to the language!
Yes, a reality common to all has been given a vibrant treatment. A unique perspective;. so unique that it appears that it has never been said before.
The poetess has spelled out how she has found out the secrets of wonderful human values like those of music, splendour, calmness, mettle, faith and victory.
She has found music in the nature, in the roosters' crowing as well as in the frogs' croak. This music breaks the slumber of the silent world.
The poetess has attained grandeur from the flowers which smile while blooming and, she owes her style to the nightingale.
Her faith is strengthened at seeing the song birds as well as the prey birds returning to their nests by the sun set.
The poetess tastes victory at getting inspired when she realises that even the darkest night fails to restrict the stars from twinkling. Thick stretches of clouds utterly fail to restrict the moon from peeping through them.
The poem is full of visual images.
Silent world, a metaphor for sleeping people has nicely been carved.
The sky is set to pour, is a metanomy worth praising.
Silent world, a metaphor for sleeping people has nicely been carved.
The sky is set to pour, is a metanomy worth praising.
The poem is beautifully rhythmed and rhymed. I will give 90 marks out of 100.The next 10 marks, i reserve, for, there is always scope for improvement.
Great effort.
Great effort.
